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[VN] Help CCM finish his first game?
Topic Started: 30 Sep 2015, 09:01 AM (575 Views)
Copy Cat Master
> http://bassnovel.com/platform/game.php?id=16509736

This game is a visual novel game and I am currently working on it. English is not my first language so, if there spelling or grammar mistake then please let me know so I can fix it. As for now, I am using Bassnovel.com to create my visual novel but I might move it to Ren'py visual novel engine (Better customization and stuff) if this one is going well like I want it to be.

To be honest, creating visual novel is not hard. The challenge in creating a visual novel is how well you can write the story and draw the character, background and etc. However, there is free resources on internet that I can use for commercial and personal uses so the only real challenge for me is writing the story because (I hate to admit it but yeah :C) my English is not perfect.

Why I want to create a visual novel? Well, gaming is my hobby and I always want to create my own game but I do not have any knowledge for that. The only option I have for now is creating a visual novel because I do not need to spend my trying to learn coding and stuff. There tons of guide & tutorial on the internet on how to create a visual novel without need to know about coding at all. Plus, I can do this as my second hobby and I might can get some benefit from this.

Anyway, the story is about Hikari and You spending their time together as girlfriend and boyfriend. I do not think what I want to do next yet. I might go with tragic story, break up, happy ending, stupid ending or something. I am still working on it so, things might get change in the future.

The only thing I want you guys to do is click the link above and play the game then give me your feedback (for the story, plot and etc). I will let you guys know when I update the game so, you guys can try it out.

So... there you go. CCM writing a novel... like literally... (You can see my passion now, right? xD)
Edited by Copy Cat Master, 30 Sep 2015, 07:28 PM.
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Why don't you just write out the story in Malay. (That's your first language right?) I'm pretty sure I can translate everything. That is if you want/need my help. :P
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Can't believe I actually read all that. It does stop at the house so far right? The English is generally very good, apart from the chucking in of random "You-chan" and "tsundere" which make no sense to boring old me.
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30 Sep 2015, 02:29 PM
Why don't you just write out the story in Malay. (That's your first language right?) I'm pretty sure I can translate everything. That is if you want/need my help. :P
Nah, I want it to be in English so everyone can read it. I just need people to read the visual novel, give me feedback and tell me if there error, spelling or grammar mistake.

I am thinking to polish it up as I am progressing so, stuff will change in the future.

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Can't believe I actually read all that. It does stop at the house so far right? The English is generally very good, apart from the chucking in of random "You-chan" and "tsundere" which make no sense to boring old me.


Yes, it stop at the house for now. "You" is the protagonist name and "Chan" is one of the Japanese honorifics. Tsundere is a Japanese term for someone that is not honest with them self.

You do not watch anime so I do not expect you to know those things but you know it now because I just explain it to you.

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Japanese honorifics: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Japanese_honorifics

What is tsundere:

Tsundere (ツンデレ ?, pronounced [tsɯndeɽe]) is a Japanese term for a character development process that describes a person who is initially cold and even hostile towards another person before gradually showing their warm side over time.
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Edited by Copy Cat Master, 30 Sep 2015, 07:23 PM.
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Wow CCM I didn't know English wasn't your first language! Your English is good.
I know Americans are not very big on learning secondary languages... Although I am pretty good at Spanish because I lived in Ecuador for a year.

If I finish my homework tonight I will check out your visual novel :)
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when you click on the walk around the park part it should be "Make sure you send me a message. If you are free next weekend and do not forget about it like last time."

Also for the birthday part you want to mention the month then the date.

There is a couple more mistakes as i zoom through but i'm tired and stopped paying attention.
Edited by Bug, 1 Oct 2015, 02:56 AM.
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30 Sep 2015, 07:16 PM
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30 Sep 2015, 02:29 PM
Why don't you just write out the story in Malay. (That's your first language right?) I'm pretty sure I can translate everything. That is if you want/need my help. :P
Nah, I want it to be in English so everyone can read it. I just need people to read the visual novel, give me feedback and tell me if there error, spelling or grammar mistake.
I think you missed my point, if you send me the story in Malay, I could translate it to English for you to put in your visual novel.
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@Flying Cat - Force the other cat to read it too with you. xD

@Bug - "Make sure you send me a message. If you are free next weekend and do not forget about it like last time". Welp, thank you this one. As for the birthday, I just yolo it because some time I see day first but some time I see month first on the internet (topic/thread/etc).

@Taz - Well, I am writing it in English so yeah. Plus, I do not finish it yet so if i write it in Malay then you need to translate it every time I update it (Which can be a pain in the butt task to do). xD
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I was reading it and then after you talked about his little sister it stopped working :/
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2 Oct 2015, 01:11 AM
I was reading it and then after you talked about his little sister it stopped working :/
It suppose to end there because I do not finish it yet. I do not do much progress because this week new anime is coming out. I am going to check all the anime and pick the one I like to watch.
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